Thank you for such a kind reply. There really is no point to asking questions after I've sent in the app, but oh well. I was thinking of deferring admission, anyway, so I guess I could do it better next year. I don't even really know what deferral entails, in terms of whether it has you at the front of the line for scholarships or the back, and the same for housing. I didn't want to ask about it, because I thought it would hurt my chances this year. I just want to get in so I can start planning my life.
I don't yet know what reapplication includes, but can you use the same recommendations and transcripts and everything, and just rewrite the personal statement and resume?
I am going to apply to at least one state school that has a later deadline, and I'll try to do better (I think that school offers tuition remission for part-time employment). My personal statement was more of a story about my job. For example, I discussed a person I admired, and just described some of the things he did, and didn't add a line to say, "That's how I learned the small things matter," or something like that. I just provided an example of a small thing that mattered a lot to me, and didn't say I want to emulate him when I work in higher education (even though, of course, I do). I hope that makes sense, and I hope the admission committee doesn't need me to overly explain things to them. I'm just wondering if I should have explained things more, or if they can read into what I have written. I guess it reveals some of the things I admire, and the kind of person I want to be.
I did talk briefly about what I want to do in higher education, and showed that I was more interested in working with students than being a researcher.
My job has been more with K-12 education, so I hope they aren't insulted that I think it can help with higher education. My references were from professionals who are familiar with my writing, so I thought that would be kind of professorial. My personal statement also talked about how I am a bit shy, or used to be a bit shy, and, again, hopefully they can read into that and conclude I didn't really talk to my professors, but I would now, if given the chance. Again, I should have spelled things out more, maybe.
Basically, the personal statement was about working with someone and developing a relationship with him that made me a more confident individual. So it wasn't really a higher education personal statement, but more just a story of an important time in my life. I hope it works.
All in all, this has been a good learning experience, and I think already I could put together a stronger application.
I had attended some workshops on law school personal statements, so I wrote my personal statement like that, and I don't know if it's supposed to be different for graduate school.