Personal Statement Help

[medicalised]

Hi there, I'm applying for a PhD in medical sciences and I'm unsure whether my personal statement is up to standard. I would really appreciate it if a grad with some knowledge in this area can have a look at it and give me some feedback.

My project would focus on using stem cell models to look at immune interactions controlling cancer formation. I've never written a personal statement for any previous course admissions and unfortunately I'm not particularly articulate. 

[DRMF]

Does the program application require a specific project proposal? Does it admit you directly to a lab/adviser, or do you go through rotations? 

In most Bio sciences fields, you do not write about a specific future project in the application, since you'll have to go through a few rotations to figure out a potential thesis topic and lab/adviser. They may have a short answer question that asks you for a potential research idea, but that's not the personal statement. You typically use your Statement of Purpose or Personal Statement to describe your academic background, personal motivations, past research experiences, and general research interests ("using stem cell models to look at immune interactions controlling cancer formation" may be an okay research area to describe in the essay, but I think that's more specific than what most people write about).

I'm happy to read over your essay, but I think you first have to make sure it answers what is asked of you in the application. Feel free to DM me.