Contacting faculty

[alui88]

So I am trying to get in touch with a professor that is new to the department and just came out of working in industry.  However all my draft emails seems to come off a bit rude, as copied below.  Does it seem rude, overly blunt or otherwise to anyone else; or am I over thinking this?

 

I am an entering master's student and noticed some of your interests includes _____.  Unfortunately I could not find any additional pertinent information on the school's network or in a broader internet search.  I was wondering if you can provide some more information with your ongoing research or provide any recent publications as I continue to look for a research adviser.  

 

Thanks!!

[zapster]

change "noticed some of your interes includes ____" to "am extremely interested by your research areas in _____" <or similar sentiment>.

 

get rid of "Unfortunately............internet search".

 

change "I was wondering...." to "I will appreciate if you could point me to resources where I may be able to find further information on........."

[Guest |||]

change "noticed some of your interes includes ____" to "am extremely interested by your research areas in _____" <or similar sentiment>.

 

get rid of "Unfortunately............internet search".

 

change "I was wondering...." to "I will appreciate if you could point me to resources where I may be able to find further information on........."

 

 

Great improvements