Critique/swap Academic SOP?

[scfitz5]

I wrote mine for the University of Michigan's Higher Ed program. Please reply below if interested in swapping and providing feedback via pm!

 

The question (btw) is below:

 

The Academic Statement of Purpose should be a concise statement about your academic and research background, your career goals, and your reasons for applying to this degree program. Please be specific in explaining how the course offerings and faculty expertise of this program fit your educational and career objectives. Please mention if you are interested in attending part-time. We are also interested in how you learned about our program.

[lzs]

I'm planning to apply to the same program in a future application season, so I don't have a draft of my own ready, but I'd be happy to look at yours anyway if you like.

[RedPill]

I'm always willing to give a read! Shoot me a PM!