HHHHgg Posted February 20, 2014 Share Posted February 20, 2014 Hello All, I need someone to review my motivation letter, my English writing skills isn't that strong and I need edition on the Grammar of the essay, if it all make sense !! They are two essays the first is motivation letter and the second is essay on my extra circular activities. The first essay Dear Admissions Committee, I am writing to express my interest in joining the MBA - International Management Program at XX. My catalyst to apply for the program is to gain a deepened study in the business administration field that would help me fulfill my future plans to grow the family owned business that I am currently running along with my father and to learn how to make savvy decisions. The concrete and solid academic curriculum of the program along with its international accreditation made me determined to work on myself more to be able to join the program. My graduation from Cairo University with a Bachelor degree in statistics has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills and improved my problem-solving ability. After my graduation, my professional career started with XX as a Junior Statistician; responsible of performing statistical and data quality checks for the clients in the retail market. Due to my strong endeavors and team support that I showed in my first year, I applied for a vacancy in the consumer research department as a Senior Executive. The tasks of the new position required a greater effort and harder work. The job responsibilities included performing statistical data analysis and also managerial tasks such as supervising with my manager both the teams of data entry, coders and interviewer, and handling the financial advisory work of the department through working with my team on achieving the targeted profit of the department and successfully it exceeded the required target by almost 20 thousand dollars. My experience with XX not only strengthened my analytical and quantitative skills, but also strengthened my ability to manage multiple teams efficiently, organize and distribute the work functions in a precise and accurate way and how to communicate the solutions and resolutions in a smooth, concise way. After a careful thought, I decided to join XX, an advertising agency that is a family owned business that was founded by my father twenty years ago, for two main reasons first to invest my skills and experience I gained previously in developing the company and second to gain a broader understanding of the market and the client management area. At the beginning of my work, I decided to develop the work flow by creating an organized work process and organized the employees’ hierarchy. And in the client management area, after two years working with the company, I was able to create a strong client relationship and introduced new clients to the company. Moreover, I worked on finding unique methods of advertising and promoting the products of the clients that some of these ideas required to cross the boarders and to cooperate with advertising agencies in other countries such as China and Lithuania. The two years’ experience with XX was intense and it gave me a chance to develop diversified professional skills including negotiation and presentation skills and also developing my sense of creativity and imagination. Taking into consideration my interests and plans, graduate business school is the next logical step. At this point in my life, I consider the MBA to be necessary since I need to gain a broader understanding of business management in order to develop and expand the family business. After the MBA program I will start my plan on expanding the services provided by the company. Finally, I believe that I possess the capability to perform well in the program and hope that the university will grant me a chance to join it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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