Justification for funding

[dagkoc]

Please could you look as i am not native speaker ?

 

“The only source of knowledge is experience.” Albert Einstein

My long term goal is to study how neuroendocrinological changes may affect behaviour and cognition. As a child I felt in love in “small thingy that changes everything” - endocrinology as my mother and I often visited clinical endocrinologist due to her illness- Addisson's Disease. Over the year I begun to observe psychological and cognition changes developing in patients with endocrinological diseases. In search for responses I decided to studying Medicine first, but as my interest in research grow, I transferred to Biomedical Sciences. Seeking Additional experiences and elucidation to some of my childhood questions I stumbled upon studies of Professor m and it pounded me that neuroendocrinology is what I have been looking for. My driving motivation in pursuing career is passion for science amd teaching, transition of “bench science” to clinical practice.

The words of Alfred Einstein, “If you can't explain it simply, you don't understand it well enough.” inspired me to challenge myself by teaching some lay- back audience neuroscientific concepts in Famelab competition, where I became a Scottish laureate. It was a great joy to fascinate public with neuroscience and possibly implant future passion. Althouht the road to Academia is often long and rocky I would like to become in future become a good professor with equal pleasure from teaching as from research. In order to pursue these long term goal I have decided to contact with professor M strengthen my lab skills and knowledge irreplaceable in pursuing PhD and later post-doc.

This research grant would allow me to gain essential experience in a lab setting among magnificent faculty, necessary to pursue future career in academia. This experience will teach me various scientific techniques in practice such as immunochemistry, western blotting, data collection and analysis, which will be substantially benefiting me in my future research career. 

[have2thinkboutit]

Just a few thoughts:

 

1. You need to have it properly proofread - phrases such as "it pounded me" do not work.

 

2. Your topic says this is supposed to justify a research grant? I do not know what exactly the grant proposal is asking you to do, but if it really is about JUSTIFICATION then I think your text does not work. You are telling us how you developed an interest in your research area, but how is this relevant to the utilization of grant money? What you are briefly summarizing in the last paragraph seems to be more relevant - unfortunately it is very vague. I would suggest to use your last paragraph as your starting point and give specific examples of how the grant would benefit your research. You say it would allow you to gain essential research experience - well, that's what it's supposed to do - tell the reader what this essential research experience is (talk about your research proposal, the topic you are going to study; show why it is an urgent/important topic so that the relevance of funding becomes clear) and how the grant would be applied to gain it (what exactly will you use the money for within your research?). Overall, I would say, be as specific as you can and try to avoid generic phrases like "benefiting me in my future career". 

 

Good luck!