Could someone look over my SOP?

[I_mix]

Hi, would anyone like to review my SOP? I would read yours as well. Any help would be appreciated.

[Forest Owlet]

Not an expert by any stretch of imagination, but can have a look. It helped to have a few of my friends go through mine. Already done with my applications, and have some free time which could be put to some use 

[DBear]

I'd be happy to look as well, but after having had 10 people look at mine, I realized that after a certain point, the principle of diminishing returns kicks in. That being said, if you want, just pm me!

[lr0901]

I'll review yours if you'll review mine!

[jamieurrutia]

I would be happy to as well.