French SOP review

[Carly Rae Jepsen]

Hello everybody,

 

This is the first draft of my personal statement for UI-Bloomington's French grad (MA/PhD) program. I realize most people advice to avoid writing statements that sound like an accomplishment list but since for this one I had only 500 words, I went for this traditional route and simply stated why I think I am a good fit. The ending sounds a bit corny so I might definitely drop it (I had a good story to go along with that ending, but I ran out of words). Let me know what you think, any advice, suggestions, word is very welcome. This is the first I've written so far, and frankly I do not hate it and feel 80% good about it.

 

Also I can return the favor if you just let me know! We're all in this together.

 

Thanks!

UI Bloominton SOP.docx