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@samman1994 Thanks so much for your input as well. I can see what you mean about the lack of transitions. As for the lack of details, I have a 500 word limit and am currently at 476 words. I was finding it difficult to cover off on my research interests, relating my interests to this particular program, articulating why I want to do the program and why I'm qualified to be doing the program, and finally trying to put a blurb at the beginning that makes me sound human... all in the space of 500 words. I think trying to cram that all in there was also why it doesn't transition well. I'll rework the organization so my interests are more concise and less spread out. As for discussing why the school should want me... Well, I'd be happy if I had a better answer for that. All I was really able to think of is "I've studied linguistics and I work really hard". I have the degree and work experience that the program is looking for, but I don't know what to say beyond that.

@GreenEyedTrombonist Not harsh at all. Thank you so much for taking the time to give very detailed and constructive feedback. I will look through your comments in detail and make some revisions. I would be happy to look at your SOP if you want to message it to me. I don't know how helpful I'll be, but I'll certainly try.

@Carly Rae Jepsen Thanks so much for your help! I'd be glad to take a look at your SOP as well.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xBFjnYu8p9cCe7_ZSr2RefPNYqiAxngPXiGG4HO9kd8/edit?usp=sharing It's for a Master's program in Applied Linguistics, but even if you're not familiar with the field, I'd appreciate any and all feedback on it. You can leave a comment here, message me, or leave comments in the document. I'm admittedly a novice at grad school applications, but in return I'm willing to read your SOP and give any feedback I can.