ramo62003 Posted October 28, 2013 Share Posted October 28, 2013 Hi everyone, I am non-native English speaker. Also, I limited myself to 30 mins. It is OK to be harsh in your feedback. I still have about 4 weeks and I am trying to improve as much as possible. The prompt: "On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals." My response: The letter tries to make a direct connection between the increased number of accidents in Blamer Island and the number of mopeds during the summer, but at the same time, it makes several of unjustified assumptions which make its argument flawed. There no evidence proves that the high number of mopeds during the summer in Blamer Island is the reason behind the high rate of accidents. The author basically made this assumption without giving any supportive data such as a report from the police department prove this direct relationship. The reason could be simply due to the poor designs of the streets in the island, or the lack for a law enforcement traffic. The list of possible causes is endless. Thus, making such an assumption without further explanation is a very weak point in the author's argument. Furthermore, the author in the letter assume that what have worked in the neighboring island will work for the Blamer Island. Despite the fact that this might have a percentage of correctness, the author did not provide any details of the other island. This assumption may hold true only if the other island is very similar to the Blamer. However, the other island might have great designed streets and existence of trained police officers, and the numbers of mopeds is its only problem. Thus, without providing more information about the neighboring island, we cannot assume that what have worked for them will work in the Blamer island. By observing the above unjustified assumptions, we can conclude that the argument makes multiple unwarranted assumptions. Therefore, the author's argument will remain weak and invalid, unless he addresses all of the mentioned assumptions and provide more data and info that proves the direct relationship between the number of accidents and the increased number of mopeds. Best Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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