[Essay] review

[klara]

Hi, I'm new to this forum as well as grad school life. And since English isn't my native language, I need help with reviewing this short essay of mine. I think it may sound not academically written or too plain. I'll appreciate any help.

“What steps would you recommend be taken to make health care in America more available to everyone?” 
Increasing Value Based Healthcare in America 

It is imperative to restructure the healthcare system with the aim of value for patients and shift away from a supply-driven system. To deliver more value, healthcare providers should focus solely on quality. To achieve this, they need to deepen their expertise so as to serve all complicated and interrelated needs of patients during their full course of care. Care should revolve around patient medical conditions. Additionally, as care is administered the results achieved should be measured against the patient’s needs. For example, diabetes involves other conditions like renal disease, hypertension, and retinal disease among others. Therefore, care delivered to diabetic patients should incorporate all these needs.  

Providers should move to bundled payments for care cycles. Patients with acute conditions pay one price to cover all treatments and interventions performed on them during their full care cycle (Porter and Lee 24). As a result, they achieve best outcomes at lower prices. Another step to take is integrating healthcare systems. The first step is defining the scope of services a provider can perform and eliminate unrealistic lines of service. Volume is concentrated by medical condition and moving non-severe cases out of heavily resourced facilities. Integrating care in this manner across the network of facilities and incorporating community resources adds value for patients, providers and improves the whole structure. 

Certain principles need to be adhered to while measuring the cost of care. Cost depends on the actual resources used in delivering care, which includes time devoted, the capacity cost of each resource and support costs required. The total cost incurred should be for the full cycle of care of the patient and not for line items, departments or services. Community providers should affiliate with a higher tier of providers to assist in complex conditions and redistribution of patients depending on the severity of the condition.  

 Works Cited

1. Bernstein, L. "Once again, U.S. has most expensive, least effective health care system in survey." Washingtonpost (2014). Retrieved from https://www.washingtonpost.com/news/to-your-health/wp/2014/06/16/once-again-u-s-has-most-expensive-least-effective-health-care-system-in-survey/
2. "Health Care Facts: Why We Need Health Care Reform." ObamaCareFacts (n.d.) Retrieved from http://obamacarefacts.com/healthcare-facts/
3. Ridic, G., Gleason, S., Ridic., O. "Comparisons of Health Care Systems in the United States, Germany and Canada." Mater Sociomed 2012; 24(2): 112–120
4. "Patients' Rights." JetWriters (n.d.) Retrieved from http://jetwriters.com/euthanasia-essay/
5. Porter, Michael E., and Thomas H. Lee. "The strategy that will fix health care." Harv Bus Rev 91.12 (2013): 24.

 

Also, in future when I am writing my thesis and stuff should I have someone proofread it? Or since the committee knows that my English isn't perfect, they may not pay too much attention to it but concentrate more on the actual research?