A couple of things.
It will be better if in your first paragraph you explicitly state your stance. Also the examples stated like the one about good looking murders doesn't seem so solid (better example might be what if the judge is related to the criminal) . The one about Steve jobs making emotion based decision also sounds wrong. I think it was the opposite with him. But in gerneral also to state that Innovators make emotion based decision doesn't seem right. Also you doesn't seem to address the second part of the essay where someone justifies his/her emotion based decision.
All in all just clearly state your stand and make better examples?