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In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

As a college student, one is expected to develop different skills that will serve the general purpose of preparing him or her for a professional environment. There are qualities that one is expected to possess as a professional that could be divided into qualities that are specific to the particular field of the student's career, and general qualities that the student should develop in order to be prepared to face problems and interact with other professionals. The first set can be labeled as technical qualities, and the latter should include qualities such as critical thinking, interpersonal skills, general world knowledge and adaptability.
One could argue that the college student will greatly benefit from focusing only on developing skills that will strengthen his/her technical skills throughout his/her college career. In other words, not being obligated to take general courses that will force him/her to read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature. That is, if the major of the college student is not related to english, literature, writing, or other majors where reading imaginative literature is essential in the professional formation of the individual. However, one is ignoring the hidden benefits that reading imaginative literature could offer to a college student. Forcing them to engage in imaginative literature, could provide benefits such as broadening the student's vocabulary, advancing the student's skills in reading comprehension, involve the student in an artistic environment, or even help in developing the student's creativity.

If the student focuses his/her college career on taking courses that are only directly related to their major, then the student is at risk of narrowing his/her perspective. The student's college career should be in greater percentage related to his/her specific field of study, however, some course load should be dedicated to other worldly subjects, where reading imaginative literature may be included. For example, a student who is pursuing a science major such as biology, will perhaps have little interest in taking a course on English Literature. This student will inevitably, given the fact that science majors are prepared to be methodological and analytical, is at risk of becoming an inflexible individual. If this biology student is forced to take courses such as English Literature, this student may learn to take a broader perspective in understanding other students that may follow a different way of thinking and processing things. This bioogy student may realize that in some occasions thinking artistically, instead of analitically, may offer advantages. In other words, this biology student may be able to develop the latter set of qualities mentioned in this text's introduction if the student is forced to take some courses that include reading imaginative literature. The student may develop critical thinking, interpersonal skills, general world knowledge and adaptability that will better prepare him/her for a professional environment.

 

[WhyTry]

I think you need to be more specific in your biology example. 

One example could be to talking about the importance of effective communication through publications that undoubtedly improve with the aforementioned courses etc. 

Don’t feel like you need to think of an example that has happened to you. Feel free to make one up. 

[minicontreras]

That is a good example I did not think of. Thank you for your suggestion  

[Boolakanaka]

From a structure and organizational level, I would be a bit more cognizant of your paragraph size, i.e., think about paring them down.

[minicontreras]

Got it, thank you for your input!