Personal Statement Read- Is it too specific?

[mcal]

Hi! I am applying this fall for Biomedical Sciences/ Molecular Biology PhD Programs. I want to do aging-related research (senescence) and I kind of geared my personal statement so it is clear that it is the type of research I want to do. However, I worry that it may be too specific. Would anyone be willing to read it and give some feedback? Please feel free to send me a message  

Thank you! 

[BabyScientist]

I'm happy to read it 

[shae123]

I am just an applicant but I will read it and give my opinion if you would life.

[Bak3rm3]

I'll be happy to read it. Shoot me a PM!

[weiliu9454]

I am happy to read it, send me if you have time:)