Can someone please critique my issue task ?

[arpesh]

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

 

    Efficiency has always been human's weakest point. Rise of technology have revolutionized the way people think about a particular task that required laborious thinking. Human's dependency on technology does not undermines their thinking ability, but instead it eases their efforts.

    It is evident that technology have developed the world to a great extent. Technologies like computers have been of great use that reduce the difficulty of the problem and makes it easier for humans. For example, a basic application like Microsoft Excel changed the way people used to keep financial records. Earlier keeping records was a tedious work.Once a data was entered it was difficult for a person to make changes without. And sometimes those changes made the work look dirty and untidy. Contrasting to that, Excel application has provided the options of Adding repetitive data, changing the values and easy categorization of data that reduced the difficulty of maintaining such hectic records. Such technologies have been implemented all over the world. 
 
    Furthermore, technology is time saving. Calculations that required profound human thinking efforts that take several minutes can be solved within seconds using scientific calculators. Additionally, writing down used to be a lengthy process. For example, as a journalist writing each and every  word of the interviewee used to be tedious and sometimes interviewer could forget or miss few points mentioned by the interviewee. But technologies such as audio or video recording have eased the work of remembering and writing down everything. Also, few applications like speech-to-text have narrowed down the effort. There are also many applications that is used to allocate a person's daily task according to the time and then remind of the task at allotted hour of the day.  

    There are various technology that improves human thinking ability. Games such as puzzle games can improves human's problem solving and analytical abilities. Additionally few games improves brain's reflexes; games genre such as action polishes our brain's quickness to respond to a problem. 
Using such technologies makes a person's brain more efficient. Also some applications like Focus helps a person stay focused at the work he/she has to do. The information that once required hours and hours of searching through the books can be at your computer screen in seconds. Internet that is a pool of great knowledge only requires few seconds of typing a query and the information is fetched to you in no time. 

Although, sometimes humans rely too much on technologies that makes human brain lazy to think for itself. Calculations such as basic additions and subtract are better done in the mind instead of relying on a calculator. But every coin has two sides and the advantages of technology by far outweighs its disadvantages.

Technology makes a human more efficient and smarter. Limited dependency on technology reduces human efforts and errors.

[rayatheking]

Your grammar is a little poor, for example “evident that technology have developed the world to a great extent”, should be has, not have. There are other similar mistakes. In the first line, it should be humans,  not human’s. Try to use commas and other punctuation where needed, I think you’re missing out on that. 
 

You have expressed your ideas well and given plenty of examples, which is good. Because of that I think you should be able to get a 4 perhaps, but you need to improve your grammar. (Disclaimer - I’m not an English student, I don’t really know how they would actually score you and I’m also technically a non native English speaker. However, I got a 5.5 in AWA)