Almost finished with my personal statement I feel stuck

[LittleDarlings]

I have written my final statement and I finished it however rereading it I don't like how it sounds. It seems choppy and I know i answered all aspects of the questions but it seems repetitive. I am going for my MSW and I really need help! If anyone on here would be amazing and possibly read it for me and give me some tips I would be forever grateful!  

[Ciarrai300]

I'd be willing to look over it for you.  Any chance you'd be willing to do the same for mine?  I'm going for my master's in special education.

[LittleDarlings]

I would love to I will inbox you thanks so much

[Calamari2013]

I'm having a similar problem, I'm done with a first draft but would love some fresh eyes to look at it. In return I'll go through yours. I'm applying for a master's degree in economics... Anyone in the same boat? Thanks