SoP first impression

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I'm applying for an internship to study a master's in a U.S. university to specialize in graphics programming and simulation.

I'm from Spain, and they rate the SoP from 1 to 8. If I don't get 8 points I get disqualified because of the competitivity and low total number of granted internships.

I will share this statement with my professors too but I would really appreciate some help online. Please have a look and tell me if it is boring, or if you honestly like it. The maximum length is 3 pages, so If you find any useless and generic area I will delete it. All criticism is welcomed.

I've already been told that my Universities section is weak, that I need to say something special about each one. What do you think about that?

Btw, the link in the document is not available yet. 
Thanks in advance.