GRE AWA Writing

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Argument Task

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

            The following passage contains a weaken argument that is based off of assumptions of a village. These are the reason I believe the argument is incoherent.

            The archeologists were exclusively studying Palea, which has ancient baskets. But they found the baskets in Lithos, so they conclude those baskets are not Palean. Plus there were no boats in Paelea. The argument is faulty. There could be interminable possibilities why both villages have similar archaeological artifacts. I wonder if archaeologists consider that maybe the people of Lithos and Palea are from the same culture or from the same ethnic group. People from similar cultures tend to have similar ways of life, even from a geographical distance. The river might have divided the groups, but it may not have divided their similarities.

            Archaeologists claim that there are no boats present in Palea but at the same time the Brim River is present. It is possible that migration took place among the villages. The river boating used to be one of the main transportation in early human history. It is likely that the village dwellers migrated upstream or down stream, left their belongings and resettled to different areas. If two villages are present across from each other and there is a river between the two, then river boating must have taken place. The archeologists did not mention any boats present in the village of Lithos. They might want to consider that the villagers of Palea may have migrated to the village of Lithos and took their belongings along.

            The passage states that Palea was found before Lithos. I wonder in which time period were the villages established. The question is whether one of them is more ancient than the other. There is no reservation in my mind that during the prehistoric times, there were geographic alterations. Sometimes geographical changes do have an impact on the lifestyle of early human beings. The woven baskets represent the lifestyles of the people of Palea and the people of Lithos. Since the river is present, I would not disregard the possibility that flooding took place between the two locations.

            The following passage is incoherent because it fails to analyze the evidence and the setting revolving the prehistoric village of Palea. The dots do not seem to be connected which makes the argument faulty.

 

 

 

Issue Task

To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

            An individual must study the foundations of all types of societies in order to understand the characteristics of a society. Only evaluating major cities will give the individual a parochial view of society.

            To gauge the characteristics of society, an individual must study the foundation of civilizations. The history of civilizations paved a way for the many characteristics of societies, which includes law, science, arts and a variety of more. Societies were based off of how human beings should supposedly function in the natural world. A good paradigm would be the roles between men and women. The roles of women and men became distinguishable since the dawn of men. In most countries, men are viewed as the breadwinners and women are viewed as the caretakers. Even though the roles have become more blurred due to the promotion of equal rights for both sexes, this distinction is reflected across the globe. This illustration demonstrates that societies across the globe are intertwined when it comes to the roles of both sexes. To have a common idea of the roles of men and women in the world, an individual must include all the parts of the world to get a good inkling of where this social construct was derived from. Studying major cities only will give the individual a one-sided story.

            Exclusively studying major cities will give the individual a narrow-scope of the characteristics of a society. Major cities that have an urban setting such as London and New York have a more diverse population where anything is plausible. They are both the melting pot of different cultures, ethnicities and backgrounds. The characteristics of each group within the city are variable and are not consistent with one another. If an individual is going to exclusively study major cities, then that individual is using the characteristics of a major city to define every society in this world, which I believe is impossible. The characteristics of one location should not mirror the characteristics of all locations across the globe. The characteristic of a major city in California does not mirror the characteristics of a village in Papua New Guinea.

            I would understand why a person would want to solely study a major city. Major cities that have an urban setting are often more dynamic and more enhanced because they have a higher population density. Major cities that are well known tend to have a lot of history. Their history is what shaped them up to this day. Their evolution to become major cities does give an individual us an insight on how societies developed over time and it gives us an insight on what characteristics helped those societies to become more prosperous. Plus, studying cities or areas across the globe can be a challenge.

            I believe in order to study the characteristics of a society an individual must acknowledge the foundation of civilization. I believe the characteristics were part of that foundation and have reflected the prosperity and development of a society.