GRE Analytical writing analysis: Argument Essay please review

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Argument: Several charitable organizations in Pleasantvillle provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. These organizations have a great need for volunteers, but in recent years, the number of teenager volunteers has significantly declined. The Pleasantville school board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. teachers, parents, and other community members agree that is important for young people to learn the value of community service. requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. for this reason, the Pleasntville school board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantvillle high school to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted. 

Response:

   Now a days, teenagers have more responsibilities and less leisure time and should not have another requirement of completing 40 hours of community service on their backs, limiting other important necessities they may have. Teenagers are very involved in sports, prepping for college in all sorts of ways and some even have jobs. Instead they should be given the choice but shown the importance of why and let them choose.    

    High school is a tough time for teenagers. They are trying to balance school, sports, jobs and more. They may or may not have time to take part in social media. Although charity is important and builds character, they need to be taught that character first and be able to choose if they want make a good decision or not. College is competitive meaning students are doing all they can to get accepted. This includes taking accredited college courses in High school, performing in sports or extra curricular activities, working to build their resume and studying for the SAT(a test for students to be accepted into college). Teenagers may be more stressed if they are pushed into another responsibility. This may also cause teenagers rebel, push them over the limit or quit because it is too much to handle.    

    Instead of forcing the teens into community service, the School Board should educate them on the importance of community service. One way they can do this is to use the ongoing motivation of getting into college as a booster with the idea that more community service can get increase their chances of getting into a good school. They can also educate them on time management so they can inevitably fit in some volunteer hours. Also incentives such as extra credit to the students who perform the most community service could also motivate the teenagers. Educating them, instead of pushing them into it can be more beneficial because it can build the students character by choosing a non-selfish decision and it can also create a more positive attitude among the students instead of the community service becoming a drag or time waster in their naive minds.    

    Overall, the school board should not force students into 40 hours of community service due to teenagers busy schedule and for their mental health of not feeling overwhelmed but instead enlighten them about the option of participating in it. There are always alternative and positive ways into getting more participants in community service than to negatively push them into it. Some students may be able to juggle it all while other teenagers can not add anymore to their plate of responsibilities.