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  1. Please help me by grading my essay written for this issue prompt. Please grade it in accordance to the GRE scoring guide .(https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/scoring_guide). Here is the issue -> “The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.” Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Essay Prompt -> Whenever it is required to understand any aspect of a culture, it is essential to underscore the factor which shapes the said culture. This gives us a better understanding of where the culture originates from and what caused the culture be like this today. Therefore, in today’s techno-centric world, the influence of the youth essentially shapes and molds the modern culture. Hence, any facet of the contemporary culture can be effectively understood by analyzing its youth’s trends. It is obvious that what shapes and defines the culture of today, can be a key to comprehend the said culture as well. Today’s youth, benefiting from technology and ease of exchanging ideas and communication, are evidently shaping the contemporary culture. For instance, consider today’s plethora of social media platform. On these platform exists several influencers and experts, many of whom have massive following. It is evident that whatever they’ll preach as a new or cool cultural trend, will be embedded in multitudes of their followers as gospel. The word-of-mouth of these followers will spread around like wildfire and soon enough, this gospel will become an amenable opinion for many people. Case in point, after the unraveling of the “Harvey Weinstein” sexual harassment case, many powerful social media celebrities like Gwenyth Paltrow, Angelina Jolie and more started preaching how toxic power-play can have adverse effects on the nascent artists, and started encouraging all the oppressed sexual harassment victims to break their silence and come forward. This empowered many artists, especially females and other common masses to stand up against sexual harassment. The daring stand fiercely spread all over the media by the youth and it became a trend. But, the instance does not end here. After the surge in the number of sexual harassment victims coming forward, the iconic philanthropist & celebrity Oprah Winfrey was moved to make her famous “Me Too” speech, sympathising with every one of the victims and empowering them to share their stories. This lead to a groundbreaking and trending “#MeToo” culture, which sent out a powerful statement underlining that sexual harassment will no longer be tolerated. Hence, from the aforementioned scenario, one can infer the cause of the the trend and how the trend propagated to the masses, along with how the trend caused the formation of a new and harassment-intolerant culture. Furthermore, it can be inferred that the youths act as a vector for spreading trends and opinion, and just in the way a scientist would better understand the cause of a disease by fully examining the vector of the disease, one can only understand the contemporary culture by studying the people responsible for causing the culture-shaping trend to spread among the masses, i.e. the youth. For instance, if in the city of Los Angeles, wearing casuals to work became popular in the youth, then in no time, there would be several businesses and companies witnessing their employees wearing casuals frequently to work. Hence, casual work-wear would become the crucial part of the Los Angeles work-life and thus, if one wanted to reason as to why casual work-wears are so “hot” in Los Angeles right now, then he/she can trace it to the relation of youth trend and culture. Admittedly, one can argue that not all of the understanding of today’s culture comes solely from the youth’s trend, but this claim only stands in certain instances. For instance, when it comes to expenditure pertaining to a specific culture, it might be true that more than the youth, a family’s trend influences it. In a culture of less to mediocre spending, it can be essentially the case that the families altogether are a little frugal and have lesser incomes, hence the trend of mediocre expenditure. But, it can not be refuted that from cuisine, body wear, luxury and many more to cultural acceptance of LGBTQ+ community and raising voice against workplace harassment; the youth majorly influences all of these trends, even more than any other set of masses. In conclusion, the propagation of the trend plays an important part and shapes the culture pertinently and so, the contemporary culture can be better comprehended if one examine the youth’s trend effectively.
  2. Please help me by grading my essay written for this argument prompt. Please grade it in accordance to the GRE scoring guide .(https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/scoring_guide). Here is the argument -> The following is a recommendation from the business manager of Monarch Books. "Since its opening in Collegeville twenty years ago, Monarch Books has developed a large customer base due to its reader-friendly atmosphere and wide selection of books on all subjects. Last month, Book and Bean, a combination bookstore and coffee shop, announced its intention to open a Collegeville store. Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in the space currently devoted to children's books. Given recent national census data indicating a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten, sales of children's books are likely to decline. By replacing its children's books section with a café, Monarch Books can increase profits and ward off competition from Book and Bean." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. Essay Response -> The business manager of “Monarch Books” claims that in order to compete with its rival “Book and Bean”, a bookstore cum coffee shop, he/she would have to replace the children’s book section with an in-store café. Stated in this way, this argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated and reveals several instances of poor reasoning. In order to justify this recommendation, the manager of “Monarch Books” has reasoned that since the recent national census data points to a significant decline in the percentage of “Under Age 10” children population, closing the Children’s Book section would only help him avoid the “foreseeable” loss on sales of children’s books. However, careful scrutiny of the facts provides little credible support for author’s recommendation. Hence his/her recommendation can be considered unsubstantiated. First of all, the argument readily assumes that closing children’s book section will not harm his/her bookshop sales, but will only help to avoid the likely decrement of the sales in the coming years. This assumption stands on hollow ground as the passage, fails to mention that how much children’s book contribute the overall sales of the bookshop. It can be possible that the children books contributed 53% of the bookshop’s overall sales. Notwithstanding the apparent decrease in children’s population, wouldn’t then the decision of closing down the most profitable section of the bookshop be ludicrous idea ? If only the amount of sales the children’s books incur at the bookshop would have been mentioned, maybe then the assumption of replacing it with a café to incur more profit would have been a tad bit more convincing. Even if the number of sales of children’s books was mentioned , the decision of including a café in the bookshop relies heavily on the manager’s hypothetical assumption that the consumers at the bookshop would indulge in coffee and other café products. It can be possible that many of their customers are just there to read books and not drink coffee. Maybe there’s an even more cheaper and far better coffee place nearer to the bookshop, and many of the bookshop customers would rather drink at that cheaper and better coffee shop outlet. So, in order to be sure that the manager’s recommendation is irrefutable, there needs to be a solid consensus from the bookshop’s ardent customers stating whether they would actually invest in the coffee and other products at the in-shop café or not. Finally, even after considering that the “Monarch Bookshop” customers would positively like to invest in the products at the in-shop café, the manager’s recommendation is weak as it doesn’t factor in the comparison of the prices of the products at their in-house café and their rival’s book-cum-coffee shop. In order to make a more convincing argument, the actual figures of the products at their in-house café and whether they are selling it at a better price than their competition or not, needs to be stated. Only then it can be determined whether it would be successful in warding off the competition or not. In essence, the business manager’s recommendation is flawed as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete facts and evidences, perhaps through a reliable survey of the consumers and a more thorough analysis of profit & losses involved in the decision of in-shop café vs. children’s book section. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be impertinent to know more information about how closing children’s book section will not harm the bookshop sales.
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