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  1. I've been working really hard to better my score in the other sections, but haven't hit the essay portion of the test as well as I would've like...Thanks in advance for taking a look at this. Everything you need is below. Here is an official scoring guide as well for ya: https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/scoring_guide Prompt: The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. My response: In the argument stating Super Screen should spend more money on advertising movies, the author makes several unwarrated assumptions. First of all, the author states that the marketing department reported increased positive reviews, but only on specific movies. It is unclear at this point what types of movies the survey reported satisfaction ratings on. For example, the survey could have just asked those who took the survey how they felt about the good movies that Super Screen produced, and left the bad movies out. It is possible that Super Screen produced bad movies that no one wanted to see, and this may be the reason for the lack of people attending the movies, but we are not told what these "specific Super Screen movies" are and, thus, can not assume that all the movies are "good" ones. To make this a fair report, the marketing department could attempt sharing with the audience proof that Super Screen movies that recieved a satisfaction rating were random. Donig so would ensure the audience that the satisfaction rating of those movies were fair. Also, provides faulty reasoning that these surveys reached the same pool as all the other mentioned years. Perhaps, these surveys were given ot a remote population that were unfamiliar with Super Screen movies. The author even neglects to share with the audience that the survey questions were even the same as last year. Therefore, the audience has no reason to believe that these surveys were not biased in some way. Another obvious fallacy in this argument is that the only thing that could bring people to watch Super Screen movies is the advertisement. Since the author does not tell us where these movies can be watched, we are left not knowing that maybe customer service, price, or even acessability could be a potetntial problem as well. All these problems could prevent people from watching their movies also. In sum, to make the author's argument more sound, the author would need to define what specific movies the reviewers reported on, and provide information about what methods the marketing department gained this report. Without more information, the reader of this argument has no way to conclude if spending more of the budget really is the best choice in this case.
  2. Taking the GRE is just a few days! I've been working really hard on the other sections, but am worrying a bit about the essays...Thanks in advance for looking at this,everything you need is below. Here is a scoring guide as well: https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/scoring_guide The Issue: The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. My response: In the before mentioned statement the author states that instilling a sense of cooperation, not competition, will better prepare the youth of a society for leadership roles. To the contrary, I myself agree that with a correct balance of the two qualities, competition will induce leadership for the next generation of leaders. First, one must recognize the fact that competition rears growth. This is what makes the capitalistic economy in America so great. For instance, businesses of all kinds are able to compete with each other to better appeal to their consumer. In order to maintain and increase productivity, they must continue trying and experimenting with the product so that consumer is more likely to buy from their company. This is advantageouss to the society, because -since these companies are allowed to compete- new and improved products are available to choose from. In addition, creativity will spark one's imagination to think critically and for oneself. If one is only taught to be exactly obedient in all things, then we could not grow as a society, thus hindering the creativity, as partly discussed in the above paragraph. In short, every member in the society would be nothing more than a robot, not able to think for themselves. At the same time, competition could easily be taken to the extreme. Someone that is too competitive can be a danger to society. For example, in presidential elections, some politicians will go as far as to lie and spread falsehoods about the opposing candidate in an effort to win the vote from the public. In this way, too much competition could damage a person's good caracter or create ill will for another person. One must remember to balance competition with a good dose of cooperation as to be fair to all parties in society. In the end, when preparing the next generation for taking on leadership roles in society, the older generation must not forget to teach friendly competition along with a fair dosage of cooperation. Forgetting to teach one without the other would mean shorthanding those young people, and suffering from inevitable future consequences.
  3. Thank you TK2! Great insights. It's so so difficult for me to think of so much and write it all down in just 30 minutes. I'll need to spend more time writing/practicing. I'll post more here. Thanks again.
  4. Thank you TK2! Great insights. It's so so difficult for me to think of so much and write it all down in just 30 minutes. I'll need to spend more time writing/practicing. I'll post more here. Thanks again.
  5. This is my first go at this. Because I timed myself, it may be rough (and maybe easier for you to grade). I understand I may need more length to this, but I am more interested in critiques on having clearly addressed the instructions and the creativity in persuading the audience. Here is a scoring guide to help: https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/scoring_guide Everything else is below. Thank you in advance! Prompt: The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. My essay: Correct methods of teachings have been explored, experimeted, and evolved within the past few decades. To a great measure, the public at large is interested in how to better teach students, children, and their collegues. In the preceeding paragraph, the author states that the best method of teaching is to praise positive actions, and ignore the negative ones. In my view, the best way to teach is not so simple as to praise positive actions and ignore the negative ones, but to address why those negative actions are wrong. Everyone is probably familiar with the phrase, “we learn from our mistakes.” In reality, one may learn just as much learn from their mistakes as they learn from their successes. The light bulb, an essential appliance to the modern-day industry, was tried and experimented over a hundred times before the recipe was finally realized. Thus, clear differentiating between what is good and what is bad, what is helpful and what is not, is necessary to successful teaching. Consider, for example, a bulgary occurred today at the local bank. If the local police ignored the bulgary, that, of course, would not help prevent future bulgaries. Secondly, if a teacher only praises positive actions, the person acting may not be truly convinced to continue those good actions. A child, for example, may become accustomed to doing good deeds only if there is a reward involved. Therefore, good intentions may be absent from the child, and may only practice good actions when the reward is present. In conclusion, it is clear how simply praising positive acitons and ignoring negative ones is a lesser form of teaching. Successful teaching comes from adressing mistakes and correcting them so that positive actions can be practiced in more abundance.
  6. So, this was my first go at it, so it'll probably be easy for you to grade. Having said that, I know I need to work on getting more length within the 30 minute time frame. I'm more interested what you think about how fluid the essay is and what assumptions you think I missed or also could have focused on. Also, here is some grading criteria that might help:https://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/argument/scoring_guide. Everything else is here below. Thank you in advance! The prompt: The council of Maple County, concerned about the county's becoming overdeveloped, is debating a proposed measure that would prevent the development of existing farmland in the county. But the council is also concerned that such a restriction, by limiting the supply of new housing, could lead to significant increases in the price of housing in the county. Proponents of the measure note that Chestnut County established a similar measure ten years ago, and its housing prices have increased only modestly since. However, opponents of the measure note that Pine County adopted restrictions on the development of new residential housing fifteen years ago, and its housing prices have since more than doubled. The council currently predicts that the proposed measure, if passed, will result in a significant increase in housing prices in Maple County. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction. My essay: The preceeding argument states that housing prices in Maple County will significantly increase if restrictions on housing developemnt are placed on the county’s farmland. This premise is not valid, as it relies on too many unsound assumptions. First, by believing that the housing prices will increase as they did in Pine County, the argument assumes that Maple County has to be similar to Pine County. Perhaps, the houses built in Maple County would be more affordable for the people there, than in Pine county. Because the argument paragraph neglects to state similarities between the two counties, the reader has no way of knowing how one county could follow the same trend as another, ultimately having same effect from the restriciton. To strengthen the premise, the author should describe to the reader the similarities Maple County has to Pine County, and the people there, reenforcing why the housing prices would rise. Another assumption that the argument fails to recognize is how things may change over time. It is stated that the housing prices in Pine County more than doubled from the same restricitons, but this was over 15 years ago. Therefore, the author believes that what was true fifeteen years ago, is true today. Even if we treated these counties as equal, this is an obvious fallacy because maybe the economy is better today for Maple County than it was back then for Pine County, and thus, the effect may favor more to that of Chestnut County, only increasing moderately. To make the argument more believable, the author must give reasons why the economics of today are similar to the economics fifeteen years ago for Pine County. In conclusion, the author relies on several unwarranted assumptions to prove that the predicted result of Maple County’s plan will be similar to that of Pine County’s.
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